The heart of your writing while sounding agreeable in the beginning, did not really sit properly with me after some time. Someplace within the paragraphs you managed to make me a believer but only for a while. I nevertheless have got a problem with your jumps in assumptions and you might do well to fill in those gaps. In the event you actually can accomplish that, I would surely end up being fascinated.
The heart of your writing while sounding agreeable in the beginning, did not really sit properly with me after some time. Someplace within the paragraphs you managed to make me a believer but only for a while. I nevertheless have got a problem with your jumps in assumptions and you might do well to fill in those gaps. In the event you actually can accomplish that, I would surely end up being fascinated.